quick quip for Friday Fictioneers…
Not as if we’ve much choice. Forward? Back? If we could see a little further, higher, or what might be underneath. There’s a reason we’re heading this direction, away from what’s behind, but still. We needed water, we’re given sand. Needing shelter, we find a beach. It won’t do to stop here, but where do we go? Carrying on is unknowing, all the same to me, and yet. Something’s bound to open up, if we could locate a horizon. You go on ahead, I’m surely unfit to lead. Why does it always seem like this?
N Filbert 2013
Real? Metaphor? Metaphysical? You left this open to interpretation very nicely!
janet
Brilliantly confusing, love it.
thank you!
thank you janet
I especially like this line, “Something’s bound to open up, if we could locate a horizon.” I love how the overall story made me feel the narrator’s confusion and frustration.
“If we could see a little further, higher, or what might be underneath.”
This reminds me of when I was younger, and I would look out my window – but just a corner, so all I would see is an inch of cloudy sky, or a handful of branches. I could then be anywhere, instead of a few feet from my neighbor’s house. This pathway here could be deserted or lively, new or old, leading to no one’s shore.
Or it could be a pathway between hotels on a manicured beach.
Muy buena narración.
Buen fin de semana
Hmmmm. Strange. I’d like to know who, what, where and why – but I reckon that’s the whole point? An enjoyable conundrum
Fit the Pic… nice one.
merci beaucoup!
thank you very much
nice challenge – to accomplish what you’d like to know in 100 words – i’m thinking…
ah life.
thank you very much for saying so
Sounds as if the person is stuck in a dream world of some sort, like Alice through the looking glass.
the weight of the moment is getting to him/her. affecting his/her thoughts now. just a matter of time until… well done.
thank you Rich
Life’s dilemmas in so few words. Thanks for introducing me to Friday Fictioneers. Well, I suppose I fell headfirst into it, via your blog! Ann
very glad you’ve joined up, and thanks
You probably have seen your quote reflected as you read the comments for this one. There is so much to glean from this one hundred word masterpiece. Bravo!
very kind, thank you
You leave a lot to the imagination here. My thoughts ranged from homeless wanderer, to grim apocalyptic future. Good internal dialog. Ron
thank you ron…my own thoughts ranged in similar options…also relationships, children escaping something, soldiers, etc…
“You go ahead, I’m not fit to lead.” Nice stream of consciousness piece. I like.
shalom,
Rochelle
thank you Rochelle
I really like your work here on this piece.
thank you!
While we may think we know where we’re going, we most often don’t get there. When we arrive, it’s rarely what was expected.
Besides, just because we’re wandering around, it doesn’t necessarily mean we’re lost.
thanks for commenting!
Brilliant! Always wondering “What’s next”
thank you
Very nicely done. I could feel the confusion and relate to it.
Tom
thanks