My response to this week’s Friday Fictioneer prompt (thanks Rochelle for the weekly work)
Her Body a Beehive
She lives. She parents. She paints.
She has pain.
She walks. She sees. She loves.
She speaks and she reaches. She sleeps. She weeps.
Occasionally, she laughs.
She thinks. She feels. She moves. She listens.
She eats and drinks. She works and worries.
She falls. She goes on. She fears. She insists.
You ask me, “how? – all this!”
“Her body is a beehive of batteries – an intricate electrical network flipping switches and adapting to surge, wearing down, sparking up – each neuron, each pulse, each collective oscillation crafting her unique motricity powered with chemicals of emotion, an elaborate and interactive field of energy, an organism.”
N Filbert 2012
41 thoughts on “Elaborate Organisms (for my wife)”
Absolutely poetical, Nathan.
My little offering is over here today http://anneorchardwriter.wordpress.com/2012/11/15/friday-fictioneers-bickering/
thank you 🙂
Nice work. Original idea.
Unique and lovely.
Wow, absolutely wonderful.
wow! thank you!
thank you so much
Love the beehive of batteries moment.
thank you 🙂
This is so poetic…love it
…whenever you write to me or for me or about me, I can’t help but pause. Your words move me to ponder my self in the world. Thank you for that.
thank you boomie
thank you for that. it’s a wonder! 🙂
What a lovely tribute. Thanks for sharing it with the rest of us. A healthy marriage is a work of art in itself.
you know your wife so well and love her so deeply. may you both live a long happy life
Very original and unique take on the prompt. Wonderfully written. 🙂
thank you for the blessing
Illustrative -well done!
Thought this was a really nice tribute. Ron
thank you Ron
Wow! all I can say, WOW.
thank you much
i bet you could cut some of those “she”s and had room for even more of a tribute. well done.
i bet you’re right on…but then
Two words: WOW – BEAUTIFUL
At last another Friday Fictioneer piece with third person and second person narration. Lovely. Yours doesn’t seem to have sparked quite the same level of debate as mine though…
Very different presentation. I thought she was going to be one of those baby dolls that does everything real babies do.
You sing the body electric.
i’m humbled 🙂
I will join in the chorus of “Wow!” This is simply wonderful. I just had one of those “damn, I wish I had wrote that” moments…
Well done. ~ Ben
thank you very much Ben – that’s really encouraging
🙂 very nice
thank you sincerely
I do hope you’re compiling these wonderful little nuggets into a book…
it is a dream of mine…