caveat: thrown together quickly! (Friday Fictioneers prompt – www.madisonwoods.wordpress.com)
Against the Day
And what was there to do?
High school now behind us, Frank’s dad dead, and no promise of college, work, or love; we were lost, angry, confused.
We’d all of us read Pynchon, we knew very well what to expect, and it wasn’t good.
And lots of it.
So much burned inside us.
At the city’s River Festival we spotted the blimp.
And somehow we knew.
We just knew.
Now, it begins.
N Filbert 2012
All my Words are Silent 
Not sure what’s going on here, but it sounds like they’re up to no good. Nice one. And I couldn’t agree with Umberto more.
love it!
thank you very much!
Very well done. Not sure what they are up to, but I would love to know what became of them! Here’s my go, if you’d like to check it out: http://theforgottenwife.com/2012/06/07/friday-fictioneers-6812/
Aha! No need for the caveat. Here’s mine: http://marilynkaydennis.wordpress.com/2012/06/07/madison-woods-friday-fictioneers-panther
I think I’m lost on this one but then I am a very literal thinker. Makes me want to know what is next though. Mine is here http://wp.me/p1LMPs-jL
Thank you – i read yours earlier – very inventive 🙂
Hmmm…sounds like more.
Here’s mine. http://www.rochelle-wisoff.blogspot.com/2012/06/wings.html
really like that! thanks for sharing!
nicely thrown together, however quickly. Felt the sense of something about to happen, as well as the expectation and anticipation, and confusion…
here’s mine: http://writersclubkl.wordpress.com/2012/06/08/friday-fictioneer-spread-your-wings-and-fly/
lovely story on your end – glad for the connexion – thx
“Now it begins…” sounds ominous! The bleakness, anger, and confusion at the beginning sets the tone for the ominous feeling at the end. Good job.
mine: http://www.vlgregory-circa1800.vpweb.com/blog.html
there will be adventures in their future.
That’s pretty interesting, though I’m wondering what’s going on. It seems like the middle of something. http://kaitlinandmichaelbranch.com/2012/06/08/friday-fictioneers-6/
Oh what’s going to happen??? I am truly hooked. Here is mine: http://remakingme-atiyatownes.blogspot.com/2012/06/friday-fictioneer-jump.html Enjoy the weekend
I know what’s going on! The Chums of Chance Against the Day. Here’s Pynchon’s own blurb for the book:
“With a worldwide disaster looming just a few years ahead, it is a time of unrestrained corporate greed, false religiosity, moronic fecklessness, and evil intent in high places. No reference to the present day is intended or should be inferred.”
I tried to write my story using Against The Day but it didn’t work. Well done!
Mine: http://repuestodelatabla.wordpress.com/2012/06/07/friday-fictioneer-100-word-story-airship/
Well thrown. Beginning at the end to end at the beginning.
Kathy
http://notforallmarkets.wordpress.com/2012/06/08/on-the-bright-side/
oops.. don’t you say they go get themselves into trouble… right out of highschool! oh no… 🙂
Nice take, and captivating story too (especially since I like school age trouble makers). Check out UP: http://niftitalks.com/2012/06/08/up/
Sounds ominous. what next? Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/06/08/fridayfictioneers-emily/
loved it 🙂
thank you so much
thank you – here i go to yours!
thanks a lot!
thank you
you can barely imagine the pleasure it gives me to have someone share the “knowing!” You are the only one…
thank you! yea it kinda jumps out at you when you see a flying machine 🙂
heading to read yours – glad to make contact!
thank you!
Now I wish I’d read more Pynchon myself — I love that feeling of recognizing a literary reference. Alas! Great pacing though, and fragmentation, and use of the space down the “page” to give it a sense of speed. Well done!
Brian (Thanks for your comment on mine — I tracked you down! Here’s the link for your readers: http://pinionpost.com/2012/06/08/11-2-seconds/)
thanks for your words!
Interesting read. Just wondering, what was beginning?
Mine’s here: http://logo-ligi.com/2012/06/08/radiant-flight/
Sounds like rebellion breweth and I’d love to find out what happened next 🙂
Sounds like an opening to what could become a great adventure novel. I liked this. Not that I condone stealing blimps or anything…but that’s what my characters did too, haha.
🙂
thanks
write it! 🙂
I might just do that 🙂
I sense a blimp-jacking coming up and then a long flight against the wind, but into adventure. Nice cadence to this piece and plenty of mood for so few words.
Aloha,
Doug
thanks for the visit and like.
my pleasure!