Clotted knots over darkness, what it had all become, and barely holding on. Together? I couldn’t say. I had thought it was my innards: veins, nerve endings, cells. Suspended precariously over bleak. Clinging. Trembling in a void. I had thought it was existence. An only way to survive. Just hanging on. In. But then you’d said it was “us.” The precarious thing, the tendentious, the threatened. You said our attachments were thin, and weakening, our threads hardly visible anymore. But look! Look at us love! We’re all woven together – we connect at many points – we form a pattern! We are webbed things. Oh don’t detach a filament, no don’t detach a one, beloved. Oh say it won’t come undone this way?
N Filbert 2012
Polysemic Stupor 
Fascinating way to look at a relationship. I question your question mark at the end. Seems out of place, no?
I kept going back and forth on that as well. Perhaps no punctuation ?
It seemed more like a statement than a question. As for punctuation, that’s one thing my editor was constantly onto me about with my anthology.
I have to weigh in on the side of a period. But I think you’ve shown well the tenuousness of this relationship, whether or not the narrator acknowledges it. Spider webs are strong, but they can break.
indeed. it requires the uncertainty, i’m letting it mull 🙂
thanks! i almost changed it and then decided it was creating conversation so i left it to see where that goes!
Rather difficult to read that last sentence as a question–I vote for a period.
I can understand your last sentence stated in a questioning voice because of uncertainty. But then I have a quirky mind and punctuation is not my strong suit…. 😉
🙂
the speaker seems to be beggaring…pleading…
Love the original point of view. Thanks.
thank YOU!
woven together very nicely!! and I liked how it was left uncertain, with the question. It really is how relationships are I reckon.
thank you
i fear her hope will not be returned.
ah the times are tough
I agree that the question marks makes the sentence an appeal.
I like the question mark
thanks 🙂