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Brave New World
Assembling for the task, we began. Each in our strengths conspiring. Tristan executed calculations which were pinpoint. Ida concocted the sounds and the language we could use, boxing up the requisite books and emotions. We counted on mama for the overall surround, a global view of the society – espousing natural characteristics and roles. Oliver modeled the world and placed it on a bucket. Everything was ready – needing only performative passion – a unified desire. We waited for Aidan, lugging the chains that would keep us on course, to hold back entropy’s risk. Leaving me to chronicle this family’s brave new world.
N Filbert 2012
So short but so utterly brilliant. Pregnant with potential. Like a hall full of slightly ajar, multicoloured doors with wonderful, strange music coming from behind each. Love it!
thank you so much!
I don’t think I can put it better than John Zande already did. So much potential here!
Thank you!
Each has his role to play. Great all-encompassing take on the prompt – nicely done.
Wow. That was amazing, every word carrying so much meaning.
Dear N,
An intriguing family you’ve written. Well done.
shalom,
Rochelle
thank you
thank you very much
thanks a lot Sandra
A very fine take on the prompt
Mr. Filbert,
I’m impressed with your vocabulary and the beautiful way you chained these words together. Very elegantly stated. Ron
thank you Ron 🙂
thank you
Very elegant way to describe a Genesis
thank you muchly
I loved the first line. Interesting story, I have to think about this one.
In an isolated world will chains hold back entropy? It may work in a Mistress dungeon but I am not sure if you can do it on a planet….I found this line to be extremely interesting “Ida concocted the sounds and the language we could use, boxing up the requisite books and emotions.” Like a happy meal for communication… a more than clever use of the prompt.
Tom
thank you Tom!
“brave” is exactly right. well done. and good luck to them all.
thanks Rich.
Syfy stuff. Interesting.
I like the sense of anticipated adventure and the way roles were appropriately divided. And your use of language.
Thank you very much Abraham
And a good chronicler you turned out to be, sir.
Aloha,
Doug
thank you Doug 🙂